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A friend of mine on another site has had a serious medical setback over the past year or so. A condition that should have required simple surgery and a brief hospital stay turned into 5 month's worth of infections and complications, and he is still recovering. He and his family are financially exhausted and need some help.

Even if you can't help yourself, please help spread the word about his gofundme. www.gofundme.com/f5orco

Thanks, all.

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He passed away today at home, due to complications of COPD. He was 83.

www.nytimes.com/2015/02/27/art…

The last tweet he personally sent out: twitter.com/TheRealNimoy/statu…
I would happily stand by all the positive comments you've received on this so far. Not only is it generally well-written, it shows to Western readership a highly significant aspect of WWII that is all too often ignored or downplayed. Americans -- and perhaps British -- tend to focus on their own achievements of that war. It's easy to forget the deep suffering and heroic actions of the Soviet Union during that time, without which Allied victory would not have come as quickly or as easily. As joyous V-E day was to the West, it must have brought ten times much jubilation to the USSR.

However, I have to quibble with a few issues here, just because that's what I do.

The disclaimers at the front say nothing more than that this is a piece of historical fiction written in English. They're not necessary. From your gallery I see you put some kind of disclaimer in front of every story you write. I'm not sure why. Is it a legal requirement where you live?

"Sven" is a very uncommon name in Russia. I know lots of Russians and not a single one is named Sven, nor could I find any Russians named Sven via Google. It gave me real trouble in trying to figure out where you had set the scene to start with. I knew it was Russia only because your disclaimer said so, but it's 4 or 5 paragraphs in before we find a clue in the text. At best I figured it was somewhere in the northwest, not too far from Scandinavia, perhaps St PetersburgLeningrad, or even somewhere in Karelia since nothing about your opening implies an urban setting. Moscow never even occurred to me.

Since this takes place in the small hours of the morning, is it 9 May, when the instrument of surrender was signed in Moscow time? If so, there would have been no "front" for about a week despite surviving pockets of German resistance, as Berlin had fallen on 2 May. But this cannot have been the fall of Berlin, since as far as I can tell Weilding surrendered Berlin to Zhukov at around 1500, and Moscow is only 2 hours ahead of Berlin.

"Bitterly cold breezes" were blowing -- in May? Was 1945 a particularly cold year? I haven't heard that it was. While May weather in Russia is far from balmy, it'd be remarkable if it were "bitterly cold" by Russian standards.

But these are just things I tripped over in what is otherwise quite a good story concerning a significant historical event. I'm submitting this as a critique so it doesn't clutter up your comments page; if you'd rather not acknowledge it for display with the story I won't mind too much.
A friend of mine on another site has had a serious medical setback over the past year or so. A condition that should have required simple surgery and a brief hospital stay turned into 5 month's worth of infections and complications, and he is still recovering. He and his family are financially exhausted and need some help.

Even if you can't help yourself, please help spread the word about his gofundme. www.gofundme.com/f5orco

Thanks, all.
I have a last name that's moderately difficult to spell.

My paternal great-grandparents were Slavs, from a region called Galicia which is now in Poland, but at the time they immigrated to the US was ruled by the Austro-Hungarian Empire. As far as they were concerned the capital city was "Pest", the half of Budapest on the east bank of the Danube. When it came to writing in "latinica", not their usual alphabet, they therefore used the prevailing rules from Hungarian. That means my name begins with a rather unexpected combination of consonants.

So anyone who asks my name will not be able to write it down or look it up if I just say it for them. I'm used to that. So I say, "I'll spell it for you," and then proceed to do just that.

Four times today -- four FUCKING times -- I got through spelling it only to be met with a blank stare, and something along the lines of "Um, what? Could you spell that again?"

Look. You asked for my name. I told you, in no uncertain terms, I was going to spell it for you. I paused after saying that, allowing you time to put your careful listening ears on. The fact I was going to spell it instead of just saying it should have been a signal that the spelling was going to be difficult. I spelled it SLOWLY, with special emphasis on the no doubt unexpected opening consonants. WOULD IT HAVE FUCKING KILLED YOU TO HAVE ACTUALLY LISTENED?

This happens all the time. But this morning did not go well, as evinced by the fact that I had occasion to give my last name out on four separate occasions. This only happens when I have business to transact, and I don't particularly enjoy transacting that much business when I'm trying to get to work. The least people could do, when I'm already having a bad day, is to FUCKING LISTEN when I'm answering their goddamn questions.
They were all online, and now they're done for. Well, one of them was on TV, but since I don't get TV I caught him when people posted his shows to YouTube.

Craig Ferguson -- Ended
Marble Hornets -- Ended
Freeman's Mind -- Ended
Run It UP -- Maybe just on hiatus, but who the fuck knows?

Now the only thing I have to look forward to are fail videos and the occasional Maru update. Might as well just crawl into a cave or something.

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You gave me one first, and I always return llamas. So thank YEW!
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